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The road ahead was hazy and sides grew tall and dense trees and lush grass, put on a little bit of green energy for the night. There was some insects chirp in the grass, which brought a little life for the night. The hung moon in the sky is so dim and the night seemed so lonely. When I walked in the secluded path, suddenly a kind of moist and fresh breath broke through in and the breath became stronger. Then I realized that the breath was from Tuttle Creek Lake.
At this time, a gust of wind blew on my face and I felt I seemed to be beyond the reality and subject to any bondage no longer. I sat on a rock nearby the lake and watched Tuttle Creek Lake. Under the deep gray sky, Tuttle Creek Lake was so tolerance and endless. It looked like a big mirror in calm on the lake formed a small sky and even hold the hazy moon in the sky. But this time this moon was not hazy, it showed bright light. The calm lake covered with silvery white armor and looked like it was ready to fight. The wind blow more fierce, he lake was no longer calm under the deep gray sky and it seemed erupt.
The calm lake started to flush the ripples and the bright mirror was full of cracks, finally the mirror was broken. The lake waves became layer upon layer and impacted on the rocks. At this time I sat nearby the lake, the broken waves fell on my feet. When I stood on the coast and faced the vast lake, I felt I became so small. At this time, the boredom in my heart had been taken away into the lake with the waves. The wind was still blowing, the lake under the moon accepted my unhappiness and I felt better ND more comfortable. I used my finger to touch the water and tasted it.
It was bitter and salty. I found the color of the lake became dirty. It mixed some soil and the color became brown. I can not see the bottom of lake and there was no plant and fish in the lake. The water was full of dirt and the water sent the smell. The bright lake became dim. Even the wild ducks didn’t want to stop on the lake and it seems the wild ducks scared and hated the dirty lake. Tuttle Creek Lake had not vitality anymore. It made me upset and despair. After a few minutes, I decided to leave here ND I did not want to come to Tuttle Creek Lake again.
The sensory chart of Tuttle Creek Lake: Moon: hazy Sky: gray Lake: bright , silvery white, calm Wind: fierce Waves of the lake: layer upon layer Lake water: bitter and salty Rhetorical Analysis I chose Tuttle Creek Lake for my descriptions in this paper and I have been to this lake before I wrote this paper. I think this can bring the positive and negatives to me, so I decided to drive to this lake at night and I paid more attention to record the view of the lake. When I came back, I did my best to use the rhetorical tools to write the essay.
The following is my point of view essay By accompanying sentences: “The road ahead was hazy and sides grew tall and dense trees and lush grass, put on a little bit of green energy for the night. There was some insects chirp in the grass, which brought a little life for the night. ” “Under the deep gray sky, Tuttle Creek Lake was so tolerance and endless. It looked like a big mirror in calm on the lake formed a small sky and even hold the hazy moon in the sky. But this time this moon was not hazy, it showed bright light. “The calm lake started to flush the ripples ND the bright mirror was full of cracks, finally the mirror was broken. The lake waves became layer upon layer and impacted on the rocks. At this time I sat nearby the lake, the broken waves fell on my feet. ” I used many descriptions in details of Tuttle Creek Lake in my paper. It can describe the characteristics of the landscape and environment better. Personification: “The calm lake covered with silvery white armor and looked like it was ready to fight. ” This is simile, the silvery white armor is the moonlight shinning on the lake.
A direct statement of meaning: “After a few minutes, I decided to leave here and I did not want to come to Tuttle Creek Lake again. “it conveys my attitude about Tuttle Creek Lake. I will not come to Tuttle Creek Lake again. Meanwhile it emphasizes my negative impression. Selection of details: “l used my finger to touch the water and tasted it. It is bitter and salty. ” This is a negative description and it means the negative paragraphs begin. Then I will write my agitated and upset mood. Reflection When I was writing this assignment, I met so many difficulties. This assignment is very complex.
I had to observation is so difficult and I need to spend too much time searching the right words. When I went to Tuttle Creek Lake, I have to record the change of the lake and describe other things, such as wind, moon and sky. Even I tasted the lake water and record it is salty and bitter. I need to think about the description of them. The mood is very important when I described Tuttle Creek Lake. When I felt agitated and upset, I found I started to use the different words to describe the lake. I have known that the different method of description can influence the reader’s perceptions.
Last week I watched an E-sports match, I did not know two teams. However, after the narrator introduced the information of two teams, I can notice the narrator pay more attention to TTS which is from America and he used too many good words to describe TTS. Obviously this narrator support TTS and he want TTS beat rival. Feedback Hello, I am Hi YK’s friend and my name is Yang. After I read this paper I think he should describe more about his mood and feeling. I never read a essay like this, but I think this is cool and I can feel the mood changed when Hi sat nearby that lake.